Age/Gender: 15, Male
Location: England
Job: Creative Design
I successfully got through the portal for the first time 17/9/06. I now have 8 collabs I'm co-authored in, 6 random shorts, 4 music videos, and 7 "Shortened Shakespeare" flash.
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Flash Reviews: 115
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This is really good. I gotta say, I wasn't expecting it to be in Russian (probably shoulda read the Author Comments first :P), but it's still a good flash. And I agree with MadAsHell, it does remind me of Edd. (Go on series and see "Edd's World", I think it's called)
But yeh, good job, and I'm looking forward to more of these.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I think Edd looks like Derek, but my style is other :-)
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Not bad. I gotta say it was quite funny, and I like how you customised your stickman, rather than having just a plain one, it makes it slightly better.
Just a few pointers. When he's walking, make him move up and down, rather than having a single simple tween. It gives him the sort of up and down movement you get when walking in real life. And also, you need a preloader. The one at the moment only lasts until it passes judgement, and a preloader helps make your flash look better before people have even watched it, giving you a better score. And finally, even though you did customise your stickman, unless you good at animating them soon, it's probably better that you start trying out learning to animate full body characters.
Hope the advice helped, nice work with this flash, and keep animating. :)
Author's Response:
danke ^_^
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The animation and movement of characters was of a fair quality, the music fitted well, and the backgrounds were very well drawn, but there's definitely room for improvement.
Biggest improvement needed is definitely a preloader. You can download them from Newgrounds, look just above the Audio Portal/Games buttons. Other than that, you could also use a bit of improvement on lip syncing, and the writing at the end could use a bit of formatting, adjusting the layout and size, just to make it look better.
But yeh, nice work here. Keep animating. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment. I appreciate it.
About the preloader: since I made this to play in the hallway TVs at my school my teacher did not want a play button because it had to play automatically. I uploaded it anyway without any buttons but I'll probably find some time at school to change it and then upload it again.
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I'm guessing you're relatively new to flash, and recently watched Animator vs Animation, but still, fair animation for a beginner. Keep practising, and it's probably a good idea to move away from sticks, and you'll get better, no doubt. I think you should probably smooth out the lines a bit, perhaps use a thinner brush, and it would look better.
Keep animating.
Author's Response:
thank you
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Good animation. I gotta say, it's probably better than my own version, which I only managed to get down to 94 seconds, rather than the 60 you got it to. Although the starting 4 or 5 seconds seemed awfully similar. But that's probably because it's the same play.
Anyways, good voice acting, good animation, good style, and just a good summary of the play overall.
Author's Response:
Ha, I actually re watched yours straight after I submitted this. Aw, yours is the original man. I love it. Even though you did cheat without having Alonso's story >:)
Ty for the review. *Watches your others*
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That was really awesome. I think there's a Weekly Award in the pipeline here. Seriously, why hasn't Nintendo hired you yet?
But give us a lil more time to read descriptions. That's my only criticism.
Author's Response:
right click play dude ;)
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Wow, I thought this collab failed! Well, well done on submitting it. I thought that dumassstudios had lost my part and my preloader, so seeing this was a bit surprising. Next question is, will there be a Sketch Collab 09?
Author's Response:
Lol, it's hard to believe I know X)
I'm not sure about a skecth collab 09, but I think I'll pass on leading it. I can't go through all that again XP
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I don't know whether or not I should vote 5 or vote 0 on this. On the one hand, the characters are cans of drink (what's with that?) and the voicing, I can only assume, was done on Speakonia. On the other hand, I the fight scene made me laugh. It's a tough one.
Author's Response:
I had to use cans of drink, or some other object simply because I was not given enough time to make a full blown animation. I had two weeks to do this and only had time to work on the weekends. Using objects like that kind of served as a shortcut for me to get this done faster.
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Looking forward to Part 2, although the main character cat's front legs were a little short (half the size they should be).
Author's Response:
(visual perspective?) Or actually, give me a solid screenshot of what you're talking about and I'll look into it. The most you see his legs are in part 2 (he's usually shown from the waist up).
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I got to episode 6 and just got bored. Sorry, but no save from me.
Author's Response:
*facepalm*
Its randomly generated content. My comment was ironic, there is no 'end'. cough#1,943
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